When most people think of Thomas Jefferson they think of him as a founding father, the author of the Declaration of Independence, and as president of the United States, that is where their amount of knowledge starts and ends. I was the same way, knowing him as only these things, but I have learned that there is so much more to know about him than just that. He was first and foremost an advocate for freedom and basic human rights. On top of that he had greater interest than just his political endeavors, these included, architecture, exploration, science, and a great emphasis on education. He founded the University of Virginia, and wanted to see public education become a reality, though he never did see that. His architecture interest came from the large amount of land that he inherited, his first love, Monticello, designing his own house and the foregrounds. One much unexpected thing about Thomas Jefferson was his on going relationship with his slave, Sally Hemmings, I would love to keep discovering more about this relationship and if it was true.
Well done! You make your sentences flow well by using a variety of structures and lengths. This would get the highest score if it weren't for a couple of places where you smoosh two sentences together. (Check the final one, for example.) Nice job!
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