Monticello is Thomas Jefferson’s beloved home. It has been documented that it was his one true love, that he would rather be there than anywhere else in the world. There is no wonder why that was how he felt, everything you could ever want is there. Located on the picturesque mountains of Virginia, the grounds of the famous home are gorgeous. Thomas Jefferson put his blood, sweat, and tears into creating this beautiful getaway from the outside world. Monticello was once home to over two hundred people, from blacksmiths to field workers they all answered to Jefferson. The large house was once home to Jefferson’s vast collection of books, and is still home to many of Jefferson’s inventions. Everything at Monticello seems to be beautiful, from the architecture of the house, to the landscaping of the foregrounds. Now you don’t have to take a full trip to visit this one of a kind home, but can take a “virtual vacation” of the whole grounds. To learn more visit http://www.monticello.org/
Beautiful photo! Strong middle section that uses details well. See if you can avoid common phrases such as "blood, sweat, and tears." Use fresh original language instead. Also, use strong verbs as much as possible. Your first few are "is, has, be, is, are." "Seems" is especially weak, so try finding stronger verbs. Good ending and sentence variety!
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